Write a sonnet???


tamarin
#31
Write on, you dabblers! I am merely trying to protect the bard. Surely, the dead are worthy of at least that.
 
Libra Girl
#32
Quote: Originally Posted by #juanView Post

You are too kind.

About 6 months ago I had a toothache that ended with a root canal. My brother suggested that I take 2 aspirins and four valiums. He said it wouldn't cure the toothache but I wouldn't give a damn.

lol. I have taken painkillers, but under no circumstances would I take valium, or anything similar.
 
Libra Girl
#33
Quote: Originally Posted by tamarinView Post

"and more importantly, others here who know what they are talking about when it comes to poetry, liked it also..."


Now that's unction for you. May I have more please?

lol.
 
hermanntrude
#34
Quote: Originally Posted by eh1ehView Post

Way back in the usenet days (news groups) I was known to participate in a limmerick group. Sadly I sucked, but I did have some fun. If I can get the right synapses firing I might throw one out.

are you familiar with isaac asimov? believe it or not he wrote a book of dirty limericks
 
eh1eh
#35
Quote: Originally Posted by hermanntrudeView Post

are you familiar with isaac asimov? believe it or not he wrote a book of dirty limericks

Yes, I have many papyrus etching by Asimov. I will search out his limericks as I was not aware of that.
 
hermanntrude
#36
it's called "lecherous limericks"
 
eh1eh
#37
Quote: Originally Posted by hermanntrudeView Post

it's called "lecherous limericks"

Found it, Example.

There was a sweet girl of Decatur Who went to sea on a freighter. She was screwed by the master -An utter disaster- But the crew all made up for it later.
 
Tonington
#38
I never did like writing sonnets much, too constrictive for my liking. That said, I have great respect for those who do it well
 
hermanntrude
#39
hehehe. I gave the book away, otherwise i'd be typing out examples. The best thing about the book was his commentary on each one. The limericks were amusing but nothing too special.
 
eh1eh
#40
Quote: Originally Posted by hermanntrudeView Post

hehehe. I gave the book away, otherwise i'd be typing out examples. The best thing about the book was his commentary on each one. The limericks were amusing but nothing too special.

OOps.

Asimov comments,
This one marked the beginning. I composed it on the Queen Elizabeth II (external - login to view) when returning from a visit to Great Britain in June, 1974. When I recited it, everyone laughed. Since that time I have been writing down limericks. I wasn't going to let myself forget them and lose laughs.
 
hermanntrude
#41
see?
 
Toro
#42
I'm a poet.
And I know it.
 
hermanntrude
#43
Quote: Originally Posted by ToroView Post

I'm a poet.
And I know it.

oh dear. Oh dear oh dear.
 
selfactivated
#44
Your eyes see through the shell I call my heart
Our worlds so polarized it seemed we were doomed from the start.
Rage turned inside out seeking Love and finding peace
Sunsets calling upon sunrises to start new days within lives
Seekers of Universal truths on paths so diverse it seems impossibly to be.
Yet it is and it was and it shall always be once we opened our hearts and eyes.
Oh what beauty is this humanity we’ve found, what joy it does bring to two seekers.
Hearts that were cold now pump warm with understanding
Eyes that were blind with rage now see the infinite color of the spirit.
On all the paths this soul has taken this one gives me the greatest joy.
Of all the companions Ive walked with forgiveness has always been coy.






like that?
 
#juan
#45
Quote: Originally Posted by selfactivatedView Post

Your eyes see through the shell I call my heart
Our worlds so polarized it seemed we were doomed from the start.
Rage turned inside out seeking Love and finding peace
Sunsets calling upon sunrises to start new days within lives
Seekers of Universal truths on paths so diverse it seems impossibly to be.
Yet it is and it was and it shall always be once we opened our hearts and eyes.
Oh what beauty is this humanity we’ve found, what joy it does bring to two seekers.
Hearts that were cold now pump warm with understanding
Eyes that were blind with rage now see the infinite color of the spirit.
On all the paths this soul has taken this one gives me the greatest joy.
Of all the companions Ive walked with forgiveness has always been coy.






like that?

Nice but I think you need 14 lines.......I could be wrong..
 
selfactivated
#46
okie dokie
 
selfactivated
#47
Your eyes see through the shell I call my heart
Our worlds so polarized it seemed we were doomed from the start.
Rage turned inside out seeking Love and finding peace
Sunsets calling upon sunrises to start new days within lives
Seekers of Universal truths on paths so diverse it seems impossibly to be.
Yet it is and it was and it shall always be once we opened our hearts and eyes.
Oh what beauty is this humanity we’ve found, what joy it does bring to two seekers.
Hearts that were cold now pump warm with understanding
Eyes that were blind with rage now see the infinite color of the spirit.
Souls that saw the master plan from the start smile sweetly on the pair.
The Universal choir vocalizes a verse of bliss that brings the world peace.
The stars above blink in agreeance that there is hope again.
On all the paths this soul has taken this one gives me the greatest joy.
Of all the companions Ive walked with forgiveness has always been coy.


Better?
 
darkbeaver
#48
Quote: Originally Posted by #juanView Post


Sorry


Can't except criticism from anyone who won't submit to the same . That was my first but I tried to follow the rules and only my lack of talent got in the way.

Why don't you torture him with another? I liked it but I'm a halfwit.
 
selfactivated
#49
Quote: Originally Posted by darkbeaverView Post

Why don't you torture him with another? I liked it but I'm a halfwit.

Your aLove *kiss* but I dont think Im good enough for this group.
 
darkbeaver
#50
Quote: Originally Posted by eh1ehView Post

Found it, Example.

There was a sweet girl of Decatur Who went to sea on a freighter. She was screwed by the master -An utter disaster- But the crew all made up for it later.


There was a young man from Leeds who swallowed a package of seeds.Now flowers and grass grow out of his *** and his balls are all covered with weeds.

I can't remember the author, I think it was Marlow.
 
darkbeaver
#51
Quote: Originally Posted by selfactivatedView Post

Your aLove *kiss* but I dont think Im good enough for this group.

What are you talking about?
 
selfactivated
#52
Quote: Originally Posted by darkbeaverView Post

What are you talking about?

Me? Why would I say anything?
 
#juan
#53
Quote: Originally Posted by selfactivatedView Post

Your eyes see through the shell I call my heart
Our worlds so polarized it seemed we were doomed from the start.
Rage turned inside out seeking Love and finding peace
Sunsets calling upon sunrises to start new days within lives
Seekers of Universal truths on paths so diverse it seems impossibly to be.
Yet it is and it was and it shall always be once we opened our hearts and eyes.
Oh what beauty is this humanity we’ve found, what joy it does bring to two seekers.
Hearts that were cold now pump warm with understanding
Eyes that were blind with rage now see the infinite color of the spirit.
Souls that saw the master plan from the start smile sweetly on the pair.
The Universal choir vocalizes a verse of bliss that brings the world peace.
The stars above blink in agreeance that there is hope again.
On all the paths this soul has taken this one gives me the greatest joy.
Of all the companions Ive walked with forgiveness has always been coy.


Better?

It looks good to me. I've only written one poem.
 
Toro
#54
Quote: Originally Posted by hermanntrudeView Post

oh dear. Oh dear oh dear.

Pfft, that's not a poem!
 
hermanntrude
#55
lol it wasnt meant to be! It was a critique on yours.
 
Libra Girl
#56
If we could but take, steps back in time
All I beheld, could once more be mine
And all that was past, now misty and cold
Be gathered together, to magically enfold
The visions beheld and naively expected, yet
Life, woken at dawn, cruelly taken by sunset
I hear you breathe, was that a sigh
Do you still walk with me, are you nigh
Did you just whisper, call out my name
Silence, so loud, as I listen in vain
Where should I go, what should I do
Bereft, and betwixt this world and you
Aimlessly drifting as leaves when in fall
Silent and still, lest my name you should call



Ok, not being anywhere near poetical, this is the best I could do... sorry.
 
tamarin
#57
I'll give you all a pass. That'll make you happy. And we'll put together the CCC anthology to float and flourish on the web. Poets like philosophers are seldom respected in their day. Your time awaits you!
 
#juan
#58
Quote: Originally Posted by Libra GirlView Post

If we could but take, steps back in time
All I beheld, could once more be mine
And all that was past, now misty and cold
Be gathered together, to magically enfold
The visions beheld and naively expected, yet
Life, woken at dawn, cruelly taken by sunset
I hear you breathe, was that a sigh
Do you still walk with me, are you nigh
Did you just whisper, call out my name
Silence, so loud, as I listen in vain
Where should I go, what should I do
Bereft, and betwixt this world and you
Aimlessly drifting as leaves when in fall
Silent and still, lest my name you should call



Ok, not being anywhere near poetical, this is the best I could do... sorry.

I love it. It was well worth the wait................
 
#juan
#59
Quote: Originally Posted by #juanView Post

Juan's Sonnet #1...Don't laugh

The wiles of women defeat men both rich and poor
There is no known defense against this threat
For the highest born ladies and the commonest hoor
Can get round men's objections and all manner of fret
What man can object to a well turned knee
A softly lifted smile and a beguiling look
That can cause a man's insides to buzz like a bee
Can make a man struggle like a fish on a hook

Is there any escape from this God-awful fate
To be led like a dog on the gentlest leash
An unholy test that's bound to cause hate
A wretched alliance to be sure, but Geesh,
Aren't they lovely to be around at that time of night
When the house is all quiet and we aspire to delight

I made a few changes...
 
Libra Girl
#60
Quote: Originally Posted by #juanView Post

I made a few changes...

And it's still great yuan!
 

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