There should be a comma after "Guests".
There should be a comma after "consequence". When "However....", "As a result....", "Consequently...." or some other such term starts a sentence, it should be followed by a comma.
There should be a full stop after the word "situation". "However" should start with a capital letter as it should be the start of a new sentence.
"Behavior" should be spelt "behaviour".
Another full stop should be placed after "disgraceful" and "therefore" should start with a capital letter as it should be the start of a new sentence.
The part of the sentence that reads "together with their families" should have a comma at either end.
There should be a comma after "this".
"Honor" should be spelt "honour".
As the letter does not address the recipients by name it should end "Yours faithfully" rather than "Yours sincerely". "Yours sincerely" is only used when the recipient(s) is/are addressed by name.
Sadly, this is a result of 13 years of Labour Government between 1997 and 2010 and modern left wing teachers not bothering to teach pupils proper grammar because those teachers believe that knowing proper grammar is not important. As a result, Britain went from fourth in the world for literacy in 1997 (when I left secondary school, so I'm better educated) to 22nd in the world in 2013. Modern left wing teaching methods is leaving us all illiterate and that letter is a perfect example of this.
Last edited by Blackleaf; Aug 17th, 2014 at 05:51 AM..